Tuesday, February 17, 2015

Great Opening Lines by Betsy Ashton

The course of true love never did run smooth. ~ William Shakespeare

As writers, we are taught, no, have it beaten into us, that we need a great hook to begin a story. I'm going to tell you a story. You tell me if this is a good hook or not.

She: I'm too exhausted to go out tonight. I want to stay in the hotel and soak in a hot bath.

Girlfriend: You have to eat. Let's go to this cool club, have dinner and you can go home.

She (reluctantly): Okay.

Later, the meal is consumed and She is still tired.

She: I'm going to the bathroom before I take the subway back to the hotel.

Girlfriend: Go ahead. I'm going to dance.

She stands in a long line. He notices her.

He: When you get done in there, do you want to dance?

Yes, dear Roses, my hubs asked me to dance when I waiting to get into the bathroom. Suave? Maybe. It worked.

What was the best hook a guy used with you? Did it work?


Betsy Ashton is the author of Mad Max Unintended Consequences available on Amazon and Barnes and Noble. The second book in the series, Uncharted Territory comes out in e-book in June 2015.


Jannine Gallant said...

I like it! An unusual opening to a love story...

Leah St. James said...

Awww. :-) I met my husband at a dorm party at Penn State. I was minding my own business when he plopped himself next to me and said, "You're sitting in my bed." :-) (No, I had no idea whose room I was in. ... Hey, I was a stupid kid!) That was almost 40 years ago.

Diane Burton said...

Betsy & Leah, what great pickup lines. That worked!

Betsy Ashton said...

I'm so sorry I dropped this and ran. I wasn't feeling well and forgot all about monitoring the responses.