Saturday, March 18, 2017
The Dreaded Sagging Middle by Jannine Gallant
No, I'm not talking about my middle, which certainly isn't as firm as it once was...but let's not go there. I'm talking about the middle of my manuscript. My books are about 90,000 words. I hit the 50,000 word mark and came to a bumpy halt in my current work in progress. I know how it ends and have enough exciting action planned for the last 20,000 words (hopefully), but that gives me 20,000 words to get to that point. (This is a series with each book required to be roughly the same length, so shortening it isn't an option.) I have a couple of events scheduled for this middle section, but I've been diddling around for days writing the first one and getting nowhere. It finally occurred to me that I'm not moving the action plot forward. It's stagnating, waiting for the exciting end. The build-up of my villain has happened. It's too early to spring the really creepy part, and the feeling of danger has tapered off with a whine and a whimper.
What to do? What to do? I think all authors go through this sagging middle phase in their writing. Or maybe they don't, and I'm just lame! It's not because I haven't made a rough outline because I finally broke down and did that. But these two big events on the schedule (a wedding and an overnight getaway for the hero and heroine) serve to progress the romantic conflict. They do zip, nada, zilch for the suspense. The problem is my book is romantic suspense. Readers expect to be kept on edge! So, what's the solution to prop up my suspense?
I turned to my trusty CP, Margo, who suggested making something happen to give the villain a sense of urgency that causes her (yes my villain is a woman) to lash out. A very good idea. Now I just have to figure out what and how. But since none of my potential bad girls have a reason to be at the wedding in progress (and I certainly can't drag all of them there), I'm still stuck. Deep sigh. So, what do all you authors do to claw your way out of the sagging middle of a manuscript. I could use a few brilliant suggestions!
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Friday, March 17, 2017
Immigration Chaos by Betsy Ashton
Whites, browns, yellows, blacks
Screeching, shoving—
Gang warfare @ the bird feeder
It's that time of year again. My bird feeder is collapsing under the weight of all the birds migrating north and immigrating to summer ranges where I live.

Who knew the mixed flocks could eat through ten pounds of seed every day? And more, if I filled a second feeder, but I don't. One is enough right now. One is all my kitty can monitor. No, she doesn't eat birds, but they keep her mesmerized for hours, both when she's inside on her perch and outside on the deck under the feeder.
Who knew cardinals could be so grumpy early in the morning? Bright red and looking miserable with hunched shoulderc, the male glared at me this morning. He was sitting next to the feeder, which he and the missus had drained of food. He was not amused until I refilled, and he had his turn to get a bellyful.
Who knew the mixed flocks would arrive so early? I didn't. Is this a sign of global warming, or the result of a shared message on the bird underground—plenty of food at the log house in the woods by the big lake? Could be either.
Who knew smaller woodpeckers and nuthatches actually come to bird feeders? I've seen plenty of nuthatches over the years, but the small woodpeckers were a welcome addition. At least I welcomed them. Not too sure about the grumpy cardinal.
Who knew titmice (titmouses??) were bullies? I always thought the blue jays were the bullies, but they aren't here yet. I've watched titmice dive bomb the kitty when she was peacefully minding her business on the lower deck under the feeder. I've watched them beat the Carolina chickadees away, so that they had to snatch a beakful and head for a branch. No sitting on the feeder perch and eating his fill for the saucy male chickadee.
Thank goodness the pileated woodpeckers wait until the carpenter bees drill holes in our house. Then, they rat-a-tat their way into the nest. The bees leave perfectly round holes; the woodpeckers leave ugly gouges. This week has been too cold for the carpenter bees. Glad the woodpeckers have been hammering on trees further down the block. What a wonderful wake up call at dawn.
Who knew how much fun it could be watching the warring birds beat each other nearly silly over a beakful of seed?
I'm so glad squirrels don't have prehensile tails, of the grumpy cardinal would be even grumpier.
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Betsy Ashton is the author of Mad Max Unintended Consequences and Uncharted Territory, A Mad Max Mystery. She has a new short story in 50 Shades of Cabernet. Her works have appeared in several anthologies and on NPR.
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Thursday, March 16, 2017
We Dodged the Storm by Donna Michaels
Hi Everyone, it’s Donna Michaels coming to you from sunny
Orlando! I’m down here celebrating my baby’s 21st birthday!
Here she is on Hogwart's Express at Universal Studios. What a fun ride. It was as if we were on the train to Hogwarts. Loved it!
Boy did we leave northeastern PA at the right time. There
are currently 22 inches of snow back home. Eww! It was so bad my husband’s
National Guard Unit was activated. Guess it’s a good thing he didn’t come down
with us.
It’s only 42 degrees here in Florida as I type, but it’ll
get up into the 60’s, so I’ll take that over the snowy 20’s back home. Hope you’re
safe and warm.
Speaking of warm, if you need a good book to curl up to, I
had a brand new release this month through Entangled! The Men of At Ease Ranch Continues
with HER SECRET RANGER! I’m so excited to share Brick’s story, it was one of my
favorites to write. J
Blurb:
Kissing the sexy soldier was a dare she couldn’t resist…
By-the-book event planner Beth Brannigan’s best friend dared
her to kiss a cowboy. She should have said no. Instead, she said please…again and again. If her brother
finds out she’s dating—okay, kissing—okay,
sleeping with—one of his military
buddies, he’ll kill her. Assuming he doesn’t kill his friend first.
Former Army Ranger Brick Mitchum isn’t a relationship kind
of guy. But then he meets Beth and starts to wonder if maybe it’s time he
settled down. She’s mysterious. Unpredictable. Curvy in every way he needs… And
hiding something. He’s just got to figure out what.
PG-13 Excerpt HER SECRET RANGER:
It was…him.
The cowboy from two weeks ago. Seriously? What were the chances he’d walk back
into her life at that exact moment? “Uh…”
“I know, right? And there’s not a wedding ring
in sight. Now go over there and kiss him.” Her snickering friend pushed her
after the hunk striding toward the livestock section of the fair. “Go on before
he gets away. Or is that what you wanted?”
She gulped. Pulled herself together. The
knowing tone in her friend’s voice revealed she expected Beth to chicken out.
Wrong.
Any other time, yes, she’d lose the dare. It
was childish and irresponsible, and she didn’t have time for foolish games. But
she did have time to help her friend de-stress. Her friend who was also her
client. It was Beth’s duty to put her client at ease. So, technically, it was
her duty to kiss the sexy cowboy whose body she knew as well as her own.
That was her story and she was sticking to it.
“Fine. I’ll do it.”
Rachel squealed and clapped her hands.
Grasping bravado with two fists, Beth set her
shoulders, lifted her chin, and marched after the hot guy striding away from
her down the fairway. So what if she’d decided he was part of her past? The
opportunity was too good to pass up. Things like this never happened to her.
Zigzagging around fairgoers, she avoided
running into two children wearing a blue coating of cotton candy, and closed in
on her prey. Her confidence rose with each step. Not only had she received her
first ever dare, she was actually in the position to have the upper hand on the
challenge.
A flicker of guilt and a touch of anxiety mixed
with excitement. She pushed them both aside and smiled when the cowboy suddenly
stiffened and came to a halt. It was as if he could feel her presence as sure
as she could feel his. Not wanting Rachel to see the guy’s expression, Beth
didn’t give him a chance to turn around. She slid in front of him, her anxiety
fading at the pleasure curving his mouth into a sexy grin, dimpling his cheeks.
“Hello, Brick,” she said.
Then she cupped his deliciously scruffed jaw,
pulled his face down, and kissed the ever loving heck out of him.
Hope you all have a great day!
Thanks for reading,
~Donna
www.DonnaMichaelsAuthor.com
Wednesday, March 15, 2017
Photo Contest by Alison Henderson
As you read this, I am visiting my daughter in Chicago, taking her and her best friend to the outlet mall for a girls' shopping day. OG is at home, manning the fort. God help us all.
If you read my post two months ago, you know that OG gave me a new camera for Christmas. I've been playing around with it since then and have managed to take a few nice pictures. That's a good thing, because I recently learned the Carmel Valley Garden Club has decided to add a photo competition to the Garden Show the first weekend in May. There are several categories, and I think it would be fun to enter at least a couple of them.
Here's the photo I plan to enter in the Landscape category. I took it with my new camera, and I think it's stunning.
Where I need your help is deciding among several photos for the Wildlife category. Here are some of my favorites, all taken in my yard. If you had to choose one, which would you choose?
All the entries have to be 8" x 10", and OG has offered to print them for me. All I have to do is choose.
Thanks for your input!
Alison
www.alisonhenderson.com
If you read my post two months ago, you know that OG gave me a new camera for Christmas. I've been playing around with it since then and have managed to take a few nice pictures. That's a good thing, because I recently learned the Carmel Valley Garden Club has decided to add a photo competition to the Garden Show the first weekend in May. There are several categories, and I think it would be fun to enter at least a couple of them.
Here's the photo I plan to enter in the Landscape category. I took it with my new camera, and I think it's stunning.
Where I need your help is deciding among several photos for the Wildlife category. Here are some of my favorites, all taken in my yard. If you had to choose one, which would you choose?
All the entries have to be 8" x 10", and OG has offered to print them for me. All I have to do is choose.
Thanks for your input!
Alison
www.alisonhenderson.com
Tuesday, March 14, 2017
Peek into PROTECTED by Christine DePetrillo
Here's a peek at the heroine in PROTECTED, Book Two in The Shielded Series. She evolves quite a bit in this book, starting off as rather helpless, but then teaming up with the hero to "save the day."
Sasha Boisette heaved in a deep breath and
let it out slowly as she sat at Mikale Warres’s desk, which had been moved to a
new secret headquarters as soon as his death had been reported to her. She’d
known her step-brother had been into some serious shit. He’d unleashed a
plague. He’d had plans to repopulate the globe. He’d hunted down the one doctor
who could stop him. He’d behaved like the villain in a cheesy graphic novel.
But he’d been her family along with his
mother. The only family she’d had since her own parents had dumped her off in
Boston.
Now she had no one. Well. That wasn’t exactly
true. Now she had all the associates still loyal to Mikale looking to her for
direction. She didn’t want the job. She was no leader, no warrior, no
disillusioned chemist. Sure, she wanted a better life just as Mikale had, but
he’d gone about it all wrong.
And now he was dead.
And he’d named her his successor.
What
was he thinking?
Unfortunately, she couldn’t ask him. Sasha
wanted to dissolve Mikale’s organization, but his followers were rabid in their
dedication to his mission of cleansing and repopulating. When she’d had her
initial meeting with his closest associates—the ones not being held at the Boston Police Department awaiting pickup from
the government—they’d talked so adamantly about continuing his work.
There had been talk about unleashing a new
plague, but none of them wanted to run the risk of getting the disease
themselves. Besides, none of them were as smart as her step-brother had been.
They didn’t know the first thing about manufacturing plagues. Another blackout
was also tossed onto the proverbial table, but no one wanted to give up the
restored power that had crawled back after Dr. Ashby’s cure was administered
globally.
Heated arguments had raged on, and every time
Sasha suggested working with the
police or the government, glares lasered into her, and if glares were knives,
she would have been reduced to minced female by now. She had to be careful
among these wolves.
She’d understood where Mikale was coming from
with his mission. He’d been wronged by Emerge Tech, the company where he’d
worked so hard. He’d lost his mother. The world was in the dark. Everything had
been a mess, so he’d done what he thought was best.
He’d strategized.
Of course, the plans he’d devised were crazy.
Wiping out the human population except for a few choice members to repopulate
the globe was completely insane. Sasha needed to find some people among
Mikale’s associates who believed as she did—believed in finding another way to
improve all their lives. Currently, she was a team of one. Not very mighty. Not
likely to succeed.
Sighing, she gathered her long, black hair
into a ponytail then fiddled with the feathery ends.
Tired.
So tired.
Trying to lead and convert an organization of
treasonous zealots was exhausting, especially when you didn’t agree with their
objectives.
“Sasha?”
She looked up to see Firrus Almstead standing
in the doorway to Mikale’s… no, her
office. She didn’t want an office. What she wanted was a tiny house. Not a
domicile, but an actual, old-fashioned home somewhere on the water, maybe a
nice, quiet lake in the woods, and a single rocking chair on a porch.
Well, maybe two rocking chairs. Not that she had anyone to fill the second one,
but one chair sounded pathetic.
And lonely.
“Where are we on the Podster fleet repair?”
Firrus flexed his biceps as he waited for her reply. Impressive may have been a word used to describe those biceps.
Hell, Sasha may have even been the person to use the word, but she didn’t care
about those biceps now.
Not
anymore.
Two years ago, she cared. She’d hardly cared
about anything that didn’t relate directly to this man standing before her now.
Firrus was over six feet of muscle with a shaved head that made his intense
brown eyes all the more powerful. You couldn’t look him directly in the eyes
for too long. The energy behind them was too much.
And that brown gaze was on her now.
“Sasha?”
She looked down to Mikale’s desk—a desk she
would never consider her own—then met Firrus’s stare. “Last report said a third
of the damaged Podsters have been fixed.” Though no one from the last battle
where Mikale had apparently been killed had returned to the base, the Podsters
were all programmed to autopilot themselves to the new headquarters in the
event of an emergency. The crafts that had returned were in shitty condition to
say the least.
“And the other two-thirds?” Firrus stepped
into the room and took a seat on one of the black leather couches lining the
far wall.
Sasha gripped the edge of the cold, steel
desk and wheeled her chair back and forth, not wanting to go to the couches,
not wanting to look at Firrus, not wanting to remember how things had been
between them. It was over now. Men like Firrus had the incredible ability to
take something and become so singularly focused on it that the rest of the
world melted away. Unfortunately for Sasha, she had not been that something Firrus had become focused on.
Mikale’s mission had been instead.
And it still was.
“The remaining two-thirds will be finished up
soon, I’m sure.” She stood, not wanting to seem like a sitting target.
Firrus shook his head. “You can’t wait for
things to happen, Sasha. You’re in charge now. You tell people what the
timeline is.”
She shrugged one shoulder then scolded
herself for doing so. That seemed weak and noncommittal, two words she didn’t
want Firrus to associate with her.
“What’s the rush, Firrus?” She rounded the
desk and made her way over to the couches after all. Best to show him he had no
power over her. She’d moved on, and as he’d said, she was in charge. “Most of
our people are still brainstorming next moves. No one is ready to hop into the
Podsters and launch the next offensive.”
Thank
goodness.
The longer the associates quibbled amongst
themselves, the longer she had to figure out an alternate course of action. It
would come to her eventually.
Right?
“But once a new plan is agreed upon, we need
to be ready to roll.” Firrus leaned forward, his elbows resting on his knees,
and ran his hands over the smooth skin of his shaved head. “Sasha, why don’t
you let me handle things? I know, in detail, what Mikale’s vision was. I can
implement the right steps. I can bring about the world he wanted. The other
associates will listen to me.”
A twinge tightened her heart over the
confident authority in his voice, but she couldn’t let Firrus get to her no
matter how Alpha he was. No matter how much she wanted someone to swoop in and
rescue her from this situation.
She shook her head. “You know Mikale was
wrong in doing what he did. He wasn’t a god. He didn’t have the power to decide
who lives and who dies. Neither do you.”
Firrus shot to his feet. “Don’t I? We’re
surrounded by less than average humans out there.” He pointed to one of the
blacked-out windows in the office. “How long before we devolve so much we’re
back to walking on all fours and grunting to each other?”
He paced to the darkened windows then
swiveled on his heel to pace back to her. “Sure, the power’s back on. Yes,
they’re rebuilding the city. Okay, the world is getting back on track, but none
of it is happening fast enough and how long before it all comes crashing back
to the ground? A simple unplug shut us all down. It won’t take much to throw
this mini-Renaissance into the toilet. We need more drastic and permanent
solutions.” He stopped in front of her.
Too
close.
Sasha could smell his familiar scent and an
unwanted longing flared inside her. How could she both crave Firrus’s touch and
cringe over the possibility of it? She knew all too well the man had fabulous
hands, but unfortunately those hands had rarely touched her.
“And none of Mikale’s tactics made the world
any better, did they? He’s dead. Some of his people are in police custody. We
live like fugitives, Firrus. How is that a good thing?” Why was she the only
one around here who saw the absurdity of this entire organization?
“Rainbows and kittens aren’t going to fix
anything either, Sasha.” He gripped her shoulders and she flinched. He
immediately let her go, staring at his hands as if he wasn’t sure how they’d
gotten on her shoulders in the first place. Jamming them into the pockets of
his cargo pants, he said, “We have to keep true to Mikale’s wishes. We owe him
that.”
She nodded if only to keep Firrus calm and
hopefully get him to leave. A mega headache was quickly blooming in her skull,
and a headache never made anything better.
“Check on the rest of the Podsters at least.”
His voice held an irritating note of disappointment, as if Sasha hadn’t met his
expectations.
He
didn’t exactly meet mine either.
But he always forgot that part. “I’ll check
on them, but I’m sure I’m going to get the same answer I gave you.”
Firrus mumbled something Sasha couldn’t quite
hear, which was probably for the best. Without a look back, he exited the
office while she stood in the middle of the room, blinking into the silence.
Blinking
into the silence. Yeah, that
pretty much summed up their relationship. At the end of it anyway. It hadn’t
started out that way. In the beginning, there had been passion and excitement
and connection. Firrus had been everything Sasha wanted. Strong, intelligent,
sexy, determined, she hadn’t been able to find a single thing wrong with him
when they’d first met.
Then everything was wrong with him.
She’d introduced him to Mikale. Like a good
brother, Mikale had put Firrus through the So You Think You’re Going to Date My
Sister interview. Firrus had scored such high points Mikale actively encouraged
Sasha to date him.
So she had.
Then she married Firrus, and
everything went to shit.
If you haven't already checked out The Shielded Series, you can get started for FREE in ebook with SAFE, Book One then follow that up with PROTECTED. Book Three, SECURED is due out soon!
Toodles,
Chris
SAFE, Book One, The Shielded Series, FREE in ebook!
PROTECTED, Book Two, The Shielded Series, available now!
SECURE, Book Three, The Shielded Series, coming soon!
Monday, March 13, 2017
You'd think I'd know by now
I work on this series once a year, usually at the first of the year. These are characters who have been with me for 6 books now, and I feel like I know them well.
As I've noted before, I have three distinct POVs going in this series: his, hers, and one that alternates between a different his/hers. Chapter 1 is hers, chapter 2 is his, chapter 3 is his/hers. I would love to write this consecutively (1, 2, 3) but I've reminded myself that I can't and still keep the distinct voices needed. I need to write Chapter 1, Chapter 4, Chapter 7, etc., in order to stay true to voice, and that means I need to jump forward and back in the plot in order to do that.
Okay, I re-discovered that one.
Here's the other thing I've re-discovered. It's not what I want to have happen. It's what is happening. By this I mean: I want these people to have a nice life and happy times and get along all the time and just hit the occasional bump.
But that's not what's happening in this world. Not everybody supports them. Some people want to kill them. They don't know who their friends are.
It's not what you want the story to be. It's what the story is. I wrote this on a slip of paper and have it taped to my computer.
Once I remembered, I knew I didn't have to look for conflict, I didn't have to invent worries, and I had more than enough to propel me forward.
But my question is: don't you think I'd know this by now?
J L
(jayellwilson.com)
As I've noted before, I have three distinct POVs going in this series: his, hers, and one that alternates between a different his/hers. Chapter 1 is hers, chapter 2 is his, chapter 3 is his/hers. I would love to write this consecutively (1, 2, 3) but I've reminded myself that I can't and still keep the distinct voices needed. I need to write Chapter 1, Chapter 4, Chapter 7, etc., in order to stay true to voice, and that means I need to jump forward and back in the plot in order to do that.
Okay, I re-discovered that one.
Here's the other thing I've re-discovered. It's not what I want to have happen. It's what is happening. By this I mean: I want these people to have a nice life and happy times and get along all the time and just hit the occasional bump.
But that's not what's happening in this world. Not everybody supports them. Some people want to kill them. They don't know who their friends are.
It's not what you want the story to be. It's what the story is. I wrote this on a slip of paper and have it taped to my computer.
Once I remembered, I knew I didn't have to look for conflict, I didn't have to invent worries, and I had more than enough to propel me forward.
But my question is: don't you think I'd know this by now?
J L
(jayellwilson.com)
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Sunday, March 12, 2017
Oh, Ernest, Say It Isn't So!
From action on the battlefield to the running of the bulls, the works of famed author Ernest Hemingway have taken us on amazing adventures. But Hemingway's own life was full of adventure, too, including a little-known chapter when he was apparently a player in the world of international espionage.
A double agent? Oh, Ernest, say it isn't so!
Although, in direct contradiction of my own words, I find the idea exciting. Think of the books we could write with that premise. Take me, for instance. An aging--okay, okay--OLD fluffy romance author traveling the world doing research and spying at the same time. Think of the situations I could get into. Well, I could. And I bet you or any of your characters could, too.
Take the time I was in Berlin and went off on my own while Calvin happily sat in a Starbucks, sipping on espressos and writing. The only German I knew was please and thank-you. I mean, one must be polite wherever you go. But Pollyanna here felt she could handle any situation with a smile.
I stumbled upon a Jewish synagogue guarded by German police. There was a new exhibit of pre-WWII Jewish treasures, buried from the Nazis, recently unearthed and cleaned up that were now on display. Neo-Nazis had threatened to bomb the synagogue where I later found out Einstein and the family of Mandelsshon, German composer, once worshipped. As I went through the metal detector, a guard spoke to me in a harsh tone.
I smiled.
He repeated his statement.
I smiled.
He motioned for a female guard, who was bigger than Atalla the Hun, and she glared at me while repeating the same phrase.
I smiled.
She yelled it.
I nervously smiled. My facial muscles had started to cramp. What in the world was wrong?
She finally grumbled, shrugged, and waved me on.
I didn't smile. "You mean to tell me I walked through 3 floors of a temple with my pants hanging open?" How could I have missed that little faux paus?
See how easy it is to come up with story ideas for your writer turned spy? I'm in the process of spiffing up a romantic suspense I'd written about five years ago. I need to update technology and insert more humor. In what was once Mona Lisa's Room, soon to be NIKO: Licensed to Kill, a simple American art teacher goes to Paris and does the same thing I did in the first two paragraphs. From then on my imagination took over.
EXCERPT:
In 2010, while Nicholas Reynolds worked
at the CIA Museum, this Oxford-trained historian discovered information
for a book he penned with a deeply researched and captivating narrative. Writer,
Sailor, Soldier, Spy, reveals his discoveries for the first time, bringing
to light the whole story of this hidden side of Hemingway's life: his troubling
recruitment by Soviet spies to work with the NKVD, the forerunner to the KGB,
followed in short order by a complex set of secret relationships with American
agencies, including the FBI, the Department of State, the Office of Naval
Intelligence (ONI), and the Office of Strategic Services (OSS), a precursor to
the CIA.
A double agent? Oh, Ernest, say it isn't so!
Although, in direct contradiction of my own words, I find the idea exciting. Think of the books we could write with that premise. Take me, for instance. An aging--okay, okay--OLD fluffy romance author traveling the world doing research and spying at the same time. Think of the situations I could get into. Well, I could. And I bet you or any of your characters could, too.
Take the time I was in Berlin and went off on my own while Calvin happily sat in a Starbucks, sipping on espressos and writing. The only German I knew was please and thank-you. I mean, one must be polite wherever you go. But Pollyanna here felt she could handle any situation with a smile.
I stumbled upon a Jewish synagogue guarded by German police. There was a new exhibit of pre-WWII Jewish treasures, buried from the Nazis, recently unearthed and cleaned up that were now on display. Neo-Nazis had threatened to bomb the synagogue where I later found out Einstein and the family of Mandelsshon, German composer, once worshipped. As I went through the metal detector, a guard spoke to me in a harsh tone.
I smiled.
He repeated his statement.
I smiled.
He motioned for a female guard, who was bigger than Atalla the Hun, and she glared at me while repeating the same phrase.
I smiled.
She yelled it.
I nervously smiled. My facial muscles had started to cramp. What in the world was wrong?
She finally grumbled, shrugged, and waved me on.
That night when we had dinner with Kelly, Calvin's son, and his Berliner wife Katrin, he inquired about our day. I told him about my experience at the synagoguee. Kelly asked what the guards kept repeating. I told him. Both he and Katrin started laughing. "Vonnie, they were telling you your zipper, your fly was down."
I didn't smile. "You mean to tell me I walked through 3 floors of a temple with my pants hanging open?" How could I have missed that little faux paus?
See how easy it is to come up with story ideas for your writer turned spy? I'm in the process of spiffing up a romantic suspense I'd written about five years ago. I need to update technology and insert more humor. In what was once Mona Lisa's Room, soon to be NIKO: Licensed to Kill, a simple American art teacher goes to Paris and does the same thing I did in the first two paragraphs. From then on my imagination took over.
EXCERPT:
A
grim-faced guard stepped in front of Alyson Moore when she raised her camera to
take a picture. “Madame, in the
Louvre, we do not photograph the Mona Lisa.”
His lips fashioned a thin line of disapproval.
Alyson’s eyes scanned the crowd, for even as
the security guard admonished her, scores of other tourists, their arms
upraised, used cell phones to snap photos. “Am I the only one trying to take a
picture here?” Without waiting for a reply, she pocketed her camera, and the
snippy, tight-assed guard moved on.
She
shouldered her way through the early morning crowd in the Salon Carrẻ to get a closer look at the painting encased in
bullet-proof glass. Seeing Da Vinci’s masterpiece was a dream come true. No
one, not even an overzealous guard, would spoil her time with Mona.
Once the
museum opened its doors at nine sharp, and Alyson passed through security, she
hurried to see this woman of mystery. The throngs of people already crowding
the room surprised her.
She slipped
between two men and stepped closer to the leading lady of the gallery. Alison’s
nose twitched from the sweet and sour blitz of assorted perfumes and various
degrees of hygiene. Murmurings of adulation echoed off the gallery walls as if
the Mona Lisa were a five-hundred-year-old rock star. How had one painting
achieved such stardom?
If the
ever-present guard wouldn’t allow photographs, she’d sketch some of Mona’s fans
standing, spellbound by her enigmatic smile. When she finally tugged her large
sketchpad free from the tight confines of her yellow leather bag, other items
fell and scattered.
Alyson
crouched to retrieve pieces of charcoal, just as the man standing next to her
bent to place a black shoulder bag, the style European men were so fond of
carrying, on the marble tile floor.
Their
eyes locked.
“Excuse
me, you’re standing on my things.” Alyson pointed to his shoe. The man, face
damp with perspiration, scowled, raised his foot and snatched her navy scarf,
hotel keycard and passport, crushing them into a ball. He stuffed the wadded scarf
into her outstretched hand and stood.
Alyson reached,
fingering for the last charcoal pencil that rolled beyond her reach. She
straightened and realized the man in the dark green t-shirt was walking away.
The tattoo of a scorpion on the back of his neck. “Sir? Sir, you’ve forgotten
your bag. Monsieur?”
He
didn’t respond.
She
called after him again.
The man
disappeared into the crowd.
The
museum guard approached. “Is there a problem, Madame?”
“Yes,
that man left his shoulder bag here.” Alyson indicated the black canvas bag on
the floor. “He set it down at the same time I dropped some things.” She held
out her navy scarf to show the guard and suddenly it hit her that her scarf was
empty. She shook it out to make sure. “My hotel key and passport!” Pulling
apart the sides of her shoulder bag, she rummaged through its contents, hoping
against hope she’d shoved them inside without thinking. Still, with her
passport the same shade as her scarf, she assumed it was wrapped in the scarf’s
folds. “I don’t believe this. He took my keycard and passport. Why would he
take my things and leave his bag behind?”
The
guard’s eyes widened for a second. “Madame,
you are sure the man left this bag?” He pressed a button and spoke into a
speaker attached to the lapel of his uniform, a scowling gaze intent on
Alyson.
“Yes.
He…he was setting it on the floor at the same time I squatted to retrieve my
fallen items. I asked him to move his foot since he was standing on them.”
Alyson groaned as realization sunk in. She was in a foreign country with no
passport. Oh, hell!
The
guard cautiously unzipped the shoulder bag. Yellow wires. The man depressed the
communications button again and spoke rapid-fire French. Pandemonium erupted. Armed
guards rushed toward the abandoned black bag. Once the word “bomb” was uttered,
visitors screamed as they stampeded from Mona Lisa’s room.
Suddenly,
Alyson stood in the eerie deafening silence with only the pounding of her heart
and the cocking of guns reverberating in her ears—she and the black bag
containing explosives surrounded by eight armed guards. Holy shit!
I'm not sure when I'll have this book ready to self-publish, but I'll be sure to let you know.
I can't get over it. Old Ernest a spy. Who-da-thunk-it!
You'll find me at www.vonniedavis.com
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