But I was able to plunge in and do a rewrite which resulted in kudos from her. "Now, that's the Brenda I love to read."
Still, there were edits to do. And edits, and edits. For some reason, every time I read this book, I find more. I thought I did my last (and third round). My editor sees it differently. Her email today said since I found so many needed corrections, I'll need to read it again. That sound is me banging my head on the wall.
I'm going to share a few of my last finds with you. Keep in mind, I had already read the book four times, and I still managed to find these. And this wasn't all I found. How is that possible??!
Page 87 line 23
Ah hell, who knows? I’ll wring the son of bitch’s neck when I find out who he is.”
Left out the word a.
Ah hell, who knows? I’ll wring the son of a bitch’s neck when I find out who he is.”
Page 205 line 8
Nearly as still as a statue, only his chest moved with a shallow breath, he studied her.
The word while left out and no need for comma.
Nearly as still as a statue, only his chest moved with a shallow breath while he studied her.
Page 298 line 13
Another buck of her hips took her breath away from the pain.
Words in wrong order.
Another buck of her hips and the pain took her breath away.
Page 337 line 28
fingers across his chest, and reveled in his thumping heart beating their rhythm on her palms.
Their should be the.
fingers across his chest, and reveled in his thumping heart beating the rhythm on her palms.
So...I'll be getting another galley to read. I'm beginning to think this book will never get published. On the other hand, I'm glad I have a patient yet hard-nosed agent behind me.
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