All of us swear when we write blurbs. Some of us have blurbs thrust upon us by publishers (and commence swearing at first sight). We indies get to swear at ourselves for every wooden phrase or hackneyed term. Since we're all trying to use the same keywords, it's no surprise our teasers sound alike. After we place the polished blurb on the back of the book, we're still growling and groaning over this or that word choice.
I come begging for feedback on the blurb below. Many of you read my Christmas short story about Sable and Carter, so you have more insight about FIRE IS NICE than anyone else I know. So have at this draft...even if you just tell me the phrase/idea you like and/or the phrase/idea you don't like. My skin is thick and I need your objectivity. Thanks!
Giant redwoods crave a scorching forest fire to release their seeds. What kind of heat will smoke poachers out of Sequoia National Park?
Criminals are stealing 11,000 year old animal bones from the caves of Sequoia. Ranger Sable Chisholm, assigned to collar the thieves, brings along her donkey and pig. Sable is a former L.A. Agent, recovering from a brain injury, which took away fear but intensified her other emotions. Ranger Carter Glass, devoted to applying logic and statistics to park problems, is Sable’s reluctant partner in crime-solving.
Then the bone-robbers start shooting rangers, deepening the mystery and pushing the stakes sky-high.
If Sable can’t control her fearlessness to team with Carter, her career is over.
For the ancient Sequoia tree, fire is nice, but Sable’s fiery personality could reduce two reputations to ashes.