Fear is a basic component of the human experience and one we need to consider when developing and challenging our characters. A few years ago I attended a workshop by best-selling author and story consultant Michael Hauge. One of the questions he insisted we ask about our characters was what do they fear most. If you know the answer to that question you can use it as an integral element of the conflict of your story. Does your heroine fear abandonment? Is your hero claustrophobic? Why? How can you use their fears to help them grow?
In my latest book, Unwritten Rules, my heroine Madelyn Li left the FBI in part because of a terrifying near-drowning incident. Her fear caused her to lose confidence in herself, as well as question her colleagues' confidence in her. In a major turning point in the story, one of the villains pushes Madelyn off a ship into San Francisco Bay, bringing her face-to-face with her fear of before she's fully ready to confront and deal with it. Later, in the climax scene, she is forced to choose whether or not to dive into Lake Michigan to try to save the same villain. This time she's ready.
Here's the first scene:
Shoes
in hand, she picked her way down the steps. A waiter balancing a tray loaded
with empty glasses approached, heading toward the galley, so she turned
sideways and pressed up against the outside rail to let him pass. She’d only
taken a couple of steps when glassware clattered behind her. She started,
dropping her shoes and purse. Before she could turn to investigate, a heavy
blow struck her from behind, launching her into the deck railing. The metal bit
into her stomach as she frantically tried to grasp it, but momentum propelled
her over the side.
She
barely had time to breathe, much less scream, before she hit the water and
plunged beneath the inky surface. Needles of pain shot through her limbs as the
cold sucked the heat from her body. Her eyes were open, but she couldn’t see. She
hung suspended in impenetrable blackness, dazed and disoriented. Her lungs
burned from an urgent need for oxygen.
Fear,
ugly and familiar, pushed its way through the fog surrounding her brain. She’d
been in this situation before and barely survived. This time she wouldn’t be so
lucky. Patrick was in Chicago. No team of agents raced to her rescue. No one
even knew she was gone. She was on her own.
Panic
gripped her. There was no air. Tendrils of deepening cold squeezed her chest
like a giant octopus as she drifted downward.
Then
instinct took over. With one powerful kick, she exploded upward. Her head broke
the surface, and she gasped.
As
she sucked in more oxygen, the fog cleared. She registered the searing cold,
the glowing lights of the ship above her, and the salt of the sea on her lips. Her
arms and legs stroked in rhythm to keep her head above water, bobbing with the
waves.
The
yacht was steadily pulling away from her. She waved one frantic arm and called
out, but the drone of the engines drowned out her puny shouts.
How
soon would Carter notice her absence? Ten minutes? Twenty?
Lights twinkled on the distant shore. She’d never make
it to land. A wave slapped her in the face, forcing water into her nose and
mouth. She choked and sputtered.And here's an excerpt from the second scene:
Madelyn
hesitated at the edge of the pier, staring at the spot where Laura had gone in,
watching for a telltale stream of bubbles. At the Academy, Laura had been a
strong swimmer, but what if she’d hit her head? She knew she should dive in and
pull the woman out, but could she make herself do it? Could she force herself
back into the same cold, black water that had nearly taken her life?
She
closed her eyes and clenched her fists. No,
no, no! She refused to be a victim again. Ever. She’d had no choice when Laura
pushed her overboard, but she had a choice now.
Before fear could stop her, Madelyn dove into the
lake. Madelyn is no longer the same person she was at the beginning of the story. She's grown and changed, and that's what we want.
5 comments:
Best ever cover and excellent excerpts. You are so right about fear. Either we get it, or it gets us.
Fear is definitely key in our characters. They need challenges to overcome. Great scenes.
Nice cover. I'm also afraid of the water and can relate. scary.
Love this! Great excerpt and it definitely makes for a richer story when you can force your character to confront their fears. My vampire huntress in my latest YA novella is afraid of blood. So...well, you know. :-)
Thanks, everyone. While I wrote this, I tried to imagine what it would feel like to drown. Now that was scary!
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