So, here's the prologue to A Deadly Love, the creepiest scene I've ever written. Enjoy!
The sniveling creature crouched in the corner was a disappointment. Where was the stunning woman from the big screen who’d incited his lust no matter how hard he tried to repress it? This pathetic shell bore no resemblance to the sassy teen who’d starred in so many of his youthful sexual fantasies. Where was the girl who’d stolen a piece of his heart?
She’d given up completely, taking the fun out of the chase. Perhaps he’d made a mistake in keeping her here alone. If she had someone with her to offer support and encouragement… Not that he’d ever been on the receiving end of such basic human kindness. Until now.
He set the lantern on the dirt floor and stared at her. Pathetic. Nearly made him want to end the game immediately and start over with the next one. But that would ruin his carefully constructed plan. Still, maybe a few adjustments were necessary. He couldn’t wait for another full moon, couldn’t stand another two weeks of cowering ineptitude. The new moon was tomorrow…
A smile slid across his face. Two at a time was the answer. It would add excitement and make the situation more interesting. In the meantime, a pep talk might motivate his current guest. He stepped forward and frowned as she shrank into a smaller ball. Nothing was visible but the top of her blonde hair and the billowing white nightgown tucked around her drawn knees.
“Maybe tonight will be the night you escape, Cybil. I’ll give you a bigger head start.” A mewling sound was his only answer. His breath whooshed out in a sigh. “Tell you what. Tomorrow I’ll bring you some company. Would you like that?”
Her head snapped up, and lusterless blue eyes stared at him. For a moment, there was a spark of animation.
Finally a reaction.
“No.” She shook her head from side to side. “No. No. No. Don’t do this to someone else.” Her voice rose in a shriek. “Just kill me and be done with it.”
“Where would be the fun in that?” he snapped. Stalking forward, he unlocked her shackles and jerked her off the cot. “Get up. It’s time to play.”
So, did I do my job? Were you a little creeped out by my killer? A Deadly Love and my other books are available on my website, Amazon, and Barnes & Noble.
9 comments:
Wow, that is a creepy excerpt, and you wrote it so well. Awesome!
Thanks, Jessica. I had a creepy stalker in Victim of Desire, but this guy is worse. Am I wrong to find writing these guys un? LOL
Enjoy, you say? Yeah right! Creepy doesn't begin to describe this scene. Wowza Yowza doesn't do it justice either. No wonder you got such a fabulous review! This is a must read for me. With the lights on and the dog near, of course.
Thanks, Margo. It does have its moments that make you check to make sure yours doors are locked.
Totally creeped me out! *shudder* But in a good way! Lovely excerpt. Er, you know what I mean. LOL
I'll share on FB! Sounds like a great read!
Thanks, Regina. It's a great book to put you in a Halloween mood! LOL
You did your job...a job well done. Great read.
LOVE the excerpt and cover, Jannine. Both are full of such atmosphere!
Thanks, Jerri!
Tanya, the cover artist did a great job of capturing the creepy feeling of the book. Thanks for stopping by.
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