I happily killed off my ex-mother-in-law, my ex-husband and
an evil-minded gossip in my first attempt at romantic suspense. It was fun,
satisfying and emotionally freeing. All that angst and anger flowed onto the
page and out of my spirit. It was then I realized I’d been too sweet, too
careful to write the nice feelings. My stories were bland. Nothing like the
roiling passions I had trapped inside.
Don’t get me wrong. I’m a fairly well-balanced personality.
I learned to dig for those buried emotions. A good writer needs to use emotions
in writing. The more powerful the emotions you use, the better. A reader might like a picnic in the park, but
a storm-ravaged mountain-top is exciting.
Building emotion is similar to building a character. You
start off with the small details. The heroine might pluck nervously at a tress
of hair or the hero drums his fingers when tense. Use the hints to show that
the character has basic traits that you will make explode off the page.
At first I was embarrassed to reveal feelings during those
close-contact sex scenes. It took me a long time to realize much of what I felt
was what everyone experiences and by adding those touches readers were drawn
into the story.
I’ve enclosed an example.
In Ancient Awakening, Police Officer ‘Mel’ Petersen investigates a
death only she believes is murder. By disobeying direct orders from the Rhodes
End Chief, she risks her career to follow clues that twist in circles to her
backyard and lead the killer to her.
Her neighbor Stephen Zoriak is a
prime suspect. Steve worked for a major pharmaceutical company where he
discovered a weapon so dangerous he destroys the research. He is exposed to the
dangerous organism. He suspects he is the killer and agrees to help her find
the truth.
In the course of their investigation
Mel and Steve find the real killer and a love that defies death.
Excerpt:
Legend
gave him many names, but the wide halls of his mountain retreat no longer
echoed with countless worshipers. He could have ruled the world had his
ambition not died with the passage of time. The endless whispers were from the
cold winds and the few praying priests. He didn’t care that he couldn’t
remember his real name or birthplace.
For
an eon he’d regretted the loss of softer emotions. Love had been the first
feeling to die, along with the woman who had insisted he would never harm her.
He couldn’t recall her features just the merry tinkle of her laughter and the
bright smile she had greeted him with every morning. He licked his lips. She’d
tasted sweet.
Fierce
need flared in his gut and he sniffed the air. Outside his chamber a single
acolyte in long brown robes waited to escort him. His mouth curved with a
mirthless smile. The silent servants had ignited the flickering wall torches.
Shadows jumped and shivered in the drafty halls like nervous virgins.
Barbara Edwards
The Wild Rose Press: Ancient Awakening, a Black Rose
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5 comments:
Fabulous final line in that excerpt! So much emotion really came through. Nice job.
Fabulous final line in that excerpt! So much emotion really came through. Nice job.
Totally got my attention. Great line.
I agree - strong emotion is key to making your story great instead of just okay. Thanks for the reminder.
Thank you all for commenting. It took me a long time to dig deep enough to share internal feelings. But it was worth it.
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